Comments on Women of Mystery: Two Sentence Tuesday

Thank you :-D

2008-05-15T17:36:00.000-04:00

Thank you :-D

Cool beans, Britta...I put a link to your blog up ...

2008-05-14T12:54:00.000-04:00

Cool beans, Britta...I put a link to your blog up in the post.

Cool stuff, Miladysa! And your blog is lovely!

2008-05-14T12:53:00.000-04:00

Cool stuff, Miladysa! And your blog is lovely!

Great lines! Love the "peeing" and "perverts" all...

2008-05-14T12:41:00.000-04:00

Great lines! Love the "peeing" and "perverts" alliteration. (See that grad class in poetry IS paying off.)

Haven't posted mine yet...will hope to get to it tomorrow for Two by Two Thursday.

Interesting sentences, Miladysa!

2008-05-14T09:34:00.000-04:00

Interesting sentences, Miladysa!

Thanks Laura :-D Here goes:Two I read:1. From a r...

2008-05-14T05:05:00.000-04:00

Thanks Laura :-D

Here goes:

Two I read:

1. From a report in a local paper upon the discovery of a 5,000 year old stone circle,

"If this was anywhere else in the world it would already be a tourist attraction."

2. From my friend Melissa over at Forge Light [http://forgeblog.blogspot.com/]

"I imagine the fashioning of this birds vocal chords being like some concoction you hear about in tales of fairies ... part spider web with dew, a little silver, and the smell of lilacs and you have yourself a bird call.”

Two from me:

1. “Pearls of snow continued to fall beyond the stone lintel window and the grey-green washed landscape of the day had been transformed into a sparkling sea of powdered white.”

2. "Henry was a good judge of character, at least of those who were alive, if the same set of rules applied to the dead then he had the impression that Stanley and he would get along just fine."

This is fun! I shall try to be on time next week :-D

Miladysa -Yep. It's a low-pressure way of keeping...

2008-05-13T19:11:00.000-04:00

Miladysa -

Yep. It's a low-pressure way of keeping motivated. Just post two sentences you read and two sentences you wrote. They can be from anything--my entry last week was two sentences from a letter to the tax collector, not from my work in progress! So join the fun! If you prefer to post on your own blog, put a note here in the comments and we'll add a link to your site onto the post.

This reads interesting :-DYou have to quote someth...

2008-05-13T18:59:00.000-04:00

This reads interesting :-D

You have to quote something from a book you have read and then a quote from something of your own? Is that right?

Travis -Rest assured, it doesn't make you sound li...

2008-05-13T12:58:00.000-04:00

Travis -

Rest assured, it doesn't make you sound like anything you aren't.

::grin::

I posted mine. I'm intrigued about those perverts ...

2008-05-13T11:42:00.000-04:00

I posted mine.

I'm intrigued about those perverts and cameras. Hope that doesn't make me sound like one.

Well, H-E-double-hockey-sticks, what a nuisance. ...

2008-05-13T11:15:00.000-04:00

Well, H-E-double-hockey-sticks, what a nuisance. Sorry.

Nan...be careful what you hint at! It's not ready...

2008-05-13T11:01:00.000-04:00

Nan...be careful what you hint at! It's not ready for public consumption yet, but I may take you up on that...

Ilana - query letters are SO HARD!!! I struggled with mine for ages.

Clare - about that project...I left my power supply at Borders yesterday. I have to go now and get it.

Nice scrivening, ladies! For all our Daphne entra...

2008-05-13T10:09:00.000-04:00

Nice scrivening, ladies! For all our Daphne entrants, I've been collaborating on a plot outline for a very different kind of project (for me). Perhaps more on that later, but here's a taste of the skeleton:

Fed up, Jody sticks her Prada pump into the gap of the door. Turning back to see if her overweight colleague's close enough to roll film, she finds herself hauled inside, tumbling to the floor from which she sees the pier and Harv shrinking in the distance.

I read: Choked with a mix of bicycles, scooters, automobiles, and the occasional Harley, traffic moved with the rhythm of a school of shiny kingfish. They had all come to enjoy paradise, to sample Duval Street's spicy gumbo of shops, bars, restaurants, and art galleries. - from Dead Run by Erica Spindler

Hmmm. Suddenly, I'm reading romantic suspense.

I'm working on the query letter, so here's two sen...

2008-05-13T08:40:00.000-04:00

I'm working on the query letter, so here's two sentences from that.
"To solve the mysteries, Claire is going to have to turn to Joel, a man who once humiliated her. Together, they’ll have to confront the murderer and deal with the ghost who has returned to deliver her own form of justice."

I've been wondering when the Daphne comments would come back. I'll start watching for the mailman...

From Sandy Parshall's DISTURBING THE DEAD: "She wa...

2008-05-12T23:29:00.000-04:00

From Sandy Parshall's DISTURBING THE DEAD: "She watched the snow come down. White flakes swirled under the streetlamps before spiraling to the ground,like crazed butterflies caught out of season, dying in the cold."

I wrote: "The Snug brothers weren't big, but they operated as a pack and they always got even. I don't know where, when, or why, but the guy's face bore the stamp of their handiwork even now."

And, Laura, I've had my share of Daphne reactions. I appreciate the variety of responses. It reminds me that some of the comments are way off-base, but others might be worth serious consideration.

Some of us would be more than willing to read through your manuscript with those "issues" in mind (hint, hint). Just pull up our off-list addresses and give a holler!

(Are you sure you're the same woman who is getting her brain recalibrated? Sounds calibrated sufficiently for me!)