Editor's caution: This fresh zinger from Nan's bawdy quill may pierce you right in your office party regrets.
Besotted, Day 2
He cinched in his belt and slicked back his hair;
She coated her lips and perfumed the air.
They billed and they cooed, a dream couple now
No more little hints of any stray growl.
Their dinner was perfect, the desert sublime -
The bill was a scorcher, but they paid no mind.
All twenties he counted, each crumpled and worn,
And left a sweet tip - from their waitress: no scorn.
He made his way past the smug maitre d',
Stopping to palm off another twenty.
His ex-wife flashed forth a dazzling smile,
That old gal's joy you could see for a mile.
The question they pondered with such a force:
Why had they surrendered to a divorce?
Full tummied they hailed their limo to come
And in the back seat things started to hum!
Saturday, December 19, 2009
Besotted Day 2
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8 comments:
I can't wait to see what happens to this couple...
Fanning myself in 20 degree weather . . . :)
I'm hooked!
I've added your blog to my blog at www.susanwhitfield.blogspot.com.
I also wanted to invite all of you to submit a recipe for the cookbook I'm compiling from mystery writers. Under each contribution, I will list the author, book titles, and Web sites. Fun, free promotion.
It's a serial!! How great, Nan!
Nan- I can't wait for part 3!
Susan- Thanks so much for the invitation. I'm not big on cooking (my husband's the cook in our family), but I do have some specialties.
Hi Nan,
I'm enjoying "Besotted" -- you've done a fine job. Many interesting word choices. I'm looking forward to the next one already!
Bring on Day 3, can't wait. I'm hooked.
Yay!!! Thank you all for your enthusiastic response - I do have more to come!
I wasn't certain the poetic approach to working on characters, plot, sensory details, etc., would work out well in couplets, but so far, so good.
I just realized I should have responded from the bard's voice!
T'was a mistake me thinks!
Next time I'll work out the kinks!
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